Beautifully Bound

[Mark Cecil]

I like how you paralleled the beauty of the woman to nature you created some nice imagery I would keep the "golden locks on high" as it suggests the woman is tall which makes her more attractive to those around her. The more I read this the more I get it and the more it grows on me but it took a while initially to understand it. Stanza 3 doesn't naturally break from stanza 2 it feels as if they need to be together to understand the poem better. You might want to consider having the poem as all one stanza or editing the first line of stanza 3: "Until the surface, struck by rock," as you could interpret to mean the woman is hit by the rock rather than the peace of the man but I suppose poems can have multiple meanings and be open to interpretation.