The Bard's Something, edit 1: Achebe, kolemath

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Hi river!  I just want to critique it because I will probably learn something.  I think you've got a real way with words that has lasting effect.

It is no lamb but lambs that draw the tiger,
say foolish ewe or schizophrenic ram --I feel like this line was needed to explain the first line.  It's a smart tiger to consider why that lamb is alone?
the burning beast whose fearful symmetrythat's cool like tiger stripes are more or less symmetrical
strikes awful dread even in pastors' eyes I naturally want to say 'in even'
spots then stalks then pounces on those alonehave you tried to say this with the accents on 'then' neat effect, but I thought the tiger would not be drawn to the lone lamb
and by his sounds of feasting draws the flockso it sounds like the tiger is drawn to the lone lamb, in order to scare the flock towards the other tigers.
toward his fellow cats. Now caution reaps
murder like courage to speak, light to see,I don't want to say murder because 'now' seems like feasting, we need light to see, courage to speak, and the tiger needs a hesitation from his prey to make the kill?
how times have changed: as lions wait for death how times have changed for all creatures, since you describe the life habits of 3 or 4 different species after?
and falcons gyre, tigers gather in packs
and wethers peel the poets from the flock,I love the sheeple 
guessing them better eucharist than eyes.'than eucharist'?
When shall God's fear revive the slouching pride,I think I know what you want to say, I see pride, I'm thinking lion they were mentioned earlier, but you start with Tiger.  Pride has two meanings, but one also has two connotations 
true art return and mend a nation's mind?I'm either seeing art as the poet's in the flock being returned, but now I can't relate the pride I had, thinking the tiger was the protagonist I guess. All creatures...the bard's warning something for sure but to who about what exactly, I missed 

The Bard's Warning


It is no lamb but lambs that draw the cat
whose fearful symmetry strikes awful dread
even in our Lord's eyes -- as if your course,
aloof and distant from the flock, should grant
security. It is no lamb -- the tiger
spots then stalks then pounces on those alone
and by his sounds of feasting draws the flock
toward his fellow hunters. Times have changed:
as lions wait for death and falcons gyre,
tigers gather in flocks and lambs divide.
When shall God's fear revive the slouching pride?
When shall new verse thus well-considered mend
a nation's mind -- and ill-considered, lead
to overthrow of slaughter, haste, and greed?