broken ship [newest version]

[Achebe]

I fell in love with my broken ship. A tragedy blew through my vessel. Strapped to the mast I tried to resist the Siren's song. But my sail is now torn and down. My comrades have jumped. The waters have colluded to toss me into the sea. I guess I drew the shortest straw. My best friend is now Jonah. Unrepentant, I'm shaking my legs wet and wooden I cry out to God, "I wish I was a real boy." He says: "Let your conscience be your guide." So collecting my courage I look the whale in the eye. I tell him to swallow me whole. With closed eyes and hands on my chest I glide into the stream as Juliet, Ophelia in the water. I surrender to the deep and trust the Blue Fairy to rescue my soul

You start with your love of a broken ship. It's not clear what the broken ship is a metaphor for - let's say it's your heart. In the second line you're strapped to your own heart, the metaphor fails. Ignoring that, let's see what happens next - you're trying to resist the Sirens' song. Who are these Sirens? Before I can make sense of it, your ship is sinking and you've moved on to Jonah and the whale, before moving on further to a Pinocchio allusion.
Finally, you've got Juliet and Ophelia in there. Ophelia drowned, but Juliet seems to be there by lazy thought association. I don't know what the Blue Fairy is.
I think you need to work on coherence. At the moment, it's just a jumble of unconnected thoughts.