10-18-2016, 01:33 PM
(10-18-2016, 12:53 PM)just mercedes Wrote: Thanks, Brownlie. I'll think over what you said - do you mean, cut the rest of the poem altogether, from 'repentance'?No. I'm just talking about that particular line with the word repentance in it. Very low level comments about words you may be able to alter a bit to give them more meaning if you feel it's necessary.
It's important to me that there's no person left alive to grieve, which I use to describe the normal death rites, such as grave, burial, and headstone. Unburied bones don't rest easy.