10-17-2016, 05:41 PM
i certainly did mean to use run twice. deftly was a mistake. it was something else before and just added it out of laziness. i hate poetry. it bores me to tears.
i don't think it is going to be a series. i couldn't keep it up. maybe it is part of a selection of poems with a similar theme. Nicky usually crops up, but Billy sounded better.
and of course i have some good sonics going on!
with regards to the previous ending, it was trite and cliché. i don't think one can write "shattered dreams" [in any context] without sounding like a complete cunt [at least i don't think i can], so i am in the process of revising it. yet, i am becoming fond of the blank space. it looks deliciously annoying and pretentious.
i don't think it is going to be a series. i couldn't keep it up. maybe it is part of a selection of poems with a similar theme. Nicky usually crops up, but Billy sounded better.
and of course i have some good sonics going on!
with regards to the previous ending, it was trite and cliché. i don't think one can write "shattered dreams" [in any context] without sounding like a complete cunt [at least i don't think i can], so i am in the process of revising it. yet, i am becoming fond of the blank space. it looks deliciously annoying and pretentious.