10-17-2016, 05:10 AM
Thanks Dukealien Thanks Crndlsm.
Great to read your thoughts on this, I wrote this a good few years back and first time getting feedback on it.
Starting of with the dream was more going with the flow of thoughts and getting me to the next part, the old man and letting him talk giving him emotion and anger and reason the rest followed in similar ways, then waking up from the dream back into a world we all live in and know very well, i suppose this poetical tale if i can call it that is all about asking questions which i didn't but because of the poetry of words i let the main character "the old man" talk.
As for the last line "Fact or Fiction" again waking up from a dream but another reason is i often thought about what it must have been like thousands of years back for the writers of books like the old and new testament and how they must of had to spend many times in deep thought laying out what they and others believe to be fact, using best our imagination in words is a wonderful gift a writer has and those writers obviously believe their imagination and probably dreams as well was more fact than the limited knowledge of their real world, planet universe that they live in at that time, but i do often wonder if they where writing those books today would they say it was fact, or fiction, sorry for going on i'm rambling now
I've edit those words Dukealien I didn't notice them until you point them out, but i always had a problem with editing this not really knowing if the commas are in the right place or should I use capital letters at the start of some or all the lines.
Thanks again and hope all that make sense
Great to read your thoughts on this, I wrote this a good few years back and first time getting feedback on it.
Starting of with the dream was more going with the flow of thoughts and getting me to the next part, the old man and letting him talk giving him emotion and anger and reason the rest followed in similar ways, then waking up from the dream back into a world we all live in and know very well, i suppose this poetical tale if i can call it that is all about asking questions which i didn't but because of the poetry of words i let the main character "the old man" talk.
As for the last line "Fact or Fiction" again waking up from a dream but another reason is i often thought about what it must have been like thousands of years back for the writers of books like the old and new testament and how they must of had to spend many times in deep thought laying out what they and others believe to be fact, using best our imagination in words is a wonderful gift a writer has and those writers obviously believe their imagination and probably dreams as well was more fact than the limited knowledge of their real world, planet universe that they live in at that time, but i do often wonder if they where writing those books today would they say it was fact, or fiction, sorry for going on i'm rambling now
I've edit those words Dukealien I didn't notice them until you point them out, but i always had a problem with editing this not really knowing if the commas are in the right place or should I use capital letters at the start of some or all the lines.
Thanks again and hope all that make sense