NATURE PLUS

[zorcas]

 
No matter how much nature thrills  'thrills' is a very bland word, almost cliche - needs something stronger
with a host of golden daffodils, cliche
or a poet’s being can subtly seize Very clunky construction - 'subtly seize' is meaningless
the loveliness of stately trees, loveliness is an abstract term, not something that can be seized
or the scent of clematis, the smell of clover, This run-on sentence needs attention. Perhaps divide the sentence.
when at last our nature walk is over, 'nature walk' is lazy vocabulary
hearing the unseen bird’s last trill, overload of adverbs and adjectives approaches
then hearing life’s far greater thrill second time you've used 'thrill' in this short piece. 
that, against nature’s best grammar needs attention, the meaning is unclear and convoluted
is often our choice I don't think you're speaking for anyone else here - maybe 'my choice'?
the friendly sound of a human voice. 

Your poem doesn't bring anything new to me, no new ways of looking at nature, or at human behaviour - it feels tired, banal in word choice and Hallmark in sentiment. This is probably because I don't like poems that lecture me. I think you need to find a way to convey your thoughts poetically. Maybe play with the contrast of human voice and the sound of birds. The smells mentioned, although a welcome sensory hook, don't build on your argument and seem an arbitrary inclusion. 'stately trees' doesn't give your reader much at all. Perhaps you could identify the tree - after all, you're on a nature walk. I also think you limit yourself unnecessarily, using rhyme.

Good points.  Trying to learn exactly what "poetic" means, since the definition of using words whose meanings are translated by the reader differs from poems in which words mean what they say, apparently called "realistic". Is this latter form out? As for rhyme. love it and am working on sonnet forms as a side line.