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The Graduate

The Graduate
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10-13-2016, 02:55 PM
I'm still not very sure about that last stanza, but still -- thus edited according to kolemath's suggestion. Starting to think melodrama isn't a very bad thing for this, and I do like the rhythm of the first stanza's last line, so those stay. Thanks for the feedback!
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The Graduate - by RiverNotch - 10-10-2016, 11:14 PM
RE: The Graduate - by kolemath - 10-11-2016, 07:50 AM
RE: The Graduate - by RiverNotch - 10-11-2016, 03:17 PM
RE: The Graduate - by Achebe - 10-11-2016, 03:30 PM
RE: The Graduate - by RiverNotch - 10-11-2016, 04:35 PM
RE: The Graduate - by Achebe - 10-11-2016, 05:03 PM
RE: The Graduate - by RiverNotch - 10-11-2016, 05:07 PM
RE: The Graduate - by kolemath - 10-11-2016, 09:53 PM
RE: The Graduate - by RiverNotch - 10-13-2016, 02:55 PM
RE: The Graduate - by kolemath - 10-13-2016, 10:06 PM



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