10-13-2016, 11:58 AM
It does read more clearly like it's about roaches now. I'm spending a lot of time following down the rabbit hole of 'nothing is two dimensional' and I don't know if that's a good sign or not. I guess I would like to see that idea developed a bit more since I keep trying to make some kind of deep, philosophical meaning out of it, and I'd like to think it's not all for naught. Ha.
I understand your ending to mean that there will always be some roaches left behind, that 5% that you just can't kill. This idea also seems rich with potential for another line or so, fleshing out that thought. I can see why you'd be trying to correlate this to some kind of human image.
I think that what you have here is good, I just want more, basically. But, I do understand that you're trying to stay with the show and not with the tell, so....take it for what it's worth.
Hope this helps,
lizziep
I understand your ending to mean that there will always be some roaches left behind, that 5% that you just can't kill. This idea also seems rich with potential for another line or so, fleshing out that thought. I can see why you'd be trying to correlate this to some kind of human image.
I think that what you have here is good, I just want more, basically. But, I do understand that you're trying to stay with the show and not with the tell, so....take it for what it's worth.
Hope this helps,
lizziep