10-12-2016, 07:35 AM
Well, Achebe, you are right about the warmed stone. Ha. Did some looking about, and I guess lizards and snakes sit on stones in the morning and at dusk to warm up. The sun will heat the rock, and it will stay a bit warm through evening, but they do lose their heat at night. Apparently, reptiles stay warm at night by burrowing under the soil, under leaves, or finding a hollow tree.
So, I learned something about lizards today!
I also changed the line to be longer in the last stanza like you suggested.
I appreciate your crit very much. Thanks for taking the time.
Liz
Alic: Yes, I've been trying to come up with a way to add more clarity at the beginning of the scene to help the reader visualize, but I think that adding specifics about location would only be a distraction from the human drama, since it's not really that relevant to the story. I've gone back and forth on this one.
Yes, I agree about starting a fresh sentence in the second stanza, and I'll go do that right now.
Thanks for coming back to the poem. >
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Liz
So, I learned something about lizards today!
I also changed the line to be longer in the last stanza like you suggested.
I appreciate your crit very much. Thanks for taking the time.
Liz
Alic: Yes, I've been trying to come up with a way to add more clarity at the beginning of the scene to help the reader visualize, but I think that adding specifics about location would only be a distraction from the human drama, since it's not really that relevant to the story. I've gone back and forth on this one.
Yes, I agree about starting a fresh sentence in the second stanza, and I'll go do that right now.
Thanks for coming back to the poem. >
< Liz