The L Word

[Leanne]

                                                                                                      
Wine and a fire's crackling warmth. -- a lot of these full stops would probably work better as commas.  This is something of a list poem, and the full stops tend to give it a staccato that -- although it might fit with the rather animalistic sex in the initial part of the poem, tends toward cliche.
Carnivorous wants cloaked
in anxious whispers.
Fluid familiar moves. -- see, if they're fluid, you wouldn't have all these full stops.  A period is the last thing you need right now.
The asynchrony of two explosions.
A duet of gasps fading
to ragged breaths.
A repeat of expected rapture
but not expecting his arms
would keep holding her tightly. -- this is good use of italics, introducing a new and unexpected concept
He wanted this to never end.
This?
No.
Her. -- a line for each of these words is not really necessary.  A colon after no would do the job, with her up on the same line.  
A new kind of explosion
rose from a whisper to a voice -- this is a very passionate line, I like it a lot
he never knew he had,
saying, while holding her happily -- you need a comma after "happily"
words he’d never said before.
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Hi Zorcas,

I find the spareness of the wording here to be effective in illustrating passion.  As I've noted, I do think some softening of the punctuation and perhaps joining together a few lines would not hurt.  The contrast between the two halves of the poem is evident without such obvious devices.  

Hope this helps.