Red Patent Shoes -- revision

[Alic Elliot]

A couple sat across the circle “the circle" seems a bit abstract
from me. She reclined on his chest,
like he was a plush couch.
He draped his arms around her,
familiar blankets. I definitely like this more than “cashmere arms"
She was like a lizard,
sheltered from a cold night
underneath sun-warmed stone,
and he was the only solid part of her. Carrying the warming into a lizard metaphor was a nice move. Good job
She rarely spoke; he talked continuously.

He said to me, "I noticed your shoes," 

and she pulled away, I'd start a new sentence here, scratching “and", as it's a shift in focus, form, mood, and it introduces a new idea.
rigid,
as if to acquire
a wider image
of a foreign object.
Then she squared
her shoulders at me
and remained that way,
like a meerkat
on guard.
Lovely ending.

A man and woman sat across
from me. She reclined into him
like he was a plush couch,
warming herself in his cashmere arms,
a familiar blanket. The way she leaned on him,
he seemed to be the only solid part of her.
She rarely spoke; he talked almost continuously.
When he spoke to me he said, "I noticed your shoes,"

and she pulled away
from him, rigid,
as if to acquire
a wider image
of a foreign object.
Then she leaned
toward me,
and remained that way,
like a meerkat
on guard.

My liking for this has only increased with the revision. On the note of the lizard metaphore- It is both a nice comparison, and it is also a desert animal, like the meerkat. 

Best,

Alic