10-11-2016, 11:34 AM
Thank you for the feedback on this- especially Dukealien. I posted in the serious critique not the mild or novice exactly to receive feedback as you have given above.
I often find it v.difficult to not "overwrite" (I.e the parts that are clearly incoherent to the unintended reader) so wanted to see what experienced readers would pick up on. Most of my writing has always been for someone specific, who'd grab the meaning. And obviously as the writer I know the meaning behind every line- but what use is that if others do not? :
I'll clarify a few things when I am using a computer (rather than as now, my phone) but thanks again as that feedback really did pretty comprehensively answer my wonderings on how self centred my writing is!
And also just to let you know I'm a meter/structure pedant- I do get them entirely- and I break them quite a bit purposefully. I mean, what's order without a bit of chaos
Ty for your time. Genuinely impressed with insight, definitely think finding this community was a gd move.
RBJ
I often find it v.difficult to not "overwrite" (I.e the parts that are clearly incoherent to the unintended reader) so wanted to see what experienced readers would pick up on. Most of my writing has always been for someone specific, who'd grab the meaning. And obviously as the writer I know the meaning behind every line- but what use is that if others do not? :
I'll clarify a few things when I am using a computer (rather than as now, my phone) but thanks again as that feedback really did pretty comprehensively answer my wonderings on how self centred my writing is!
And also just to let you know I'm a meter/structure pedant- I do get them entirely- and I break them quite a bit purposefully. I mean, what's order without a bit of chaos
Ty for your time. Genuinely impressed with insight, definitely think finding this community was a gd move.
RBJ