10-11-2016, 05:32 AM
New version is up.
Thanks to everyone who commented -- I got lots of great perspectives and suggestions. >
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My goal for this revision was scene clarity. Pick it apart and let me know what's still missing.
Thanks for reading
lizziep
Thanks to everyone who commented -- I got lots of great perspectives and suggestions. >
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< My goal for this revision was scene clarity. Pick it apart and let me know what's still missing.
Thanks for reading
lizziep

