Chrysalis [Edit 1]

[kolemath]

great title choice. try to bring out that metaphor more? some lines contradict the metaphor. chrysalis phase of ongoing metamorphosis, so things feeling wrong or trapped feels off. these are natural changes, which could be an interesting way to discuss gender reassignment, assuming that what this poem is getting at.

Trapped

In a body that is my own
But feels as if it is not generally, 'feel' should be avoided. 'but is not' would be stronger; something more specific would be even better
Wishing I could have chosen
For myself lines 3 and 4 are fair enough, getting into the mental conflict

Strange, that. this line is confusing; i generally am against capitalizing every line, but that's a style choice

The appeal of one set of genitalia o.k. i see the above line can work as an enjambment to this line, but how it fits to s2? appeal to whom?
Versus another, and how one
Could feel again on 'feel' ..do insects swap sexes?

So
Very
Wrong wrong could work conceptually for the metaphor but is abstract

Chemicals, hormones
Building muscle, stretching bone muscles and bones of insects?
Cloth binding breasts
That will soon be gone

Would it be wrong repetiton of wrong is interesting
To compare this
To metamorphosis? so here from person to bug; i don't think this is the metamorphosis the speaker wants, but the opposite, from bug to human.

i guess the question comes down to how you want to use the metaphor. my reading and critique is for an allegory. maybe the chrysalis comparison is more subtle in your intention, but i encourage you to draw it out more. cloth binding breasts could work well for spreading wings. surgically removing breasts could more closely resemble the chrysalis transformation.  i hope these comments are of some use.