10-09-2016, 12:16 PM
I know you aren't looking for critique, but I found this enjoyable but with some that could be cut - "down" on the first line, etc. the passive voice interjection on s2 was appropriate where normally I would balk.
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< winter's coming > - by rayheinrich - 10-09-2016, 12:10 PM
RE: < winter's coming > - by milo - 10-09-2016, 12:16 PM
RE: < winter's coming > - by rayheinrich - 10-09-2016, 06:05 PM
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