'Thanks' 'You're Welcome' edit 1 a little closer

[tectak]

This is the intro and outro of a larger work that's supposed to follow the 5 stages of grief.  I think the 'Thanks' is fine.  'You're Welcome' was originally just called 'You've Got Her Back'  but I was thinking of the greater scheme...  which seems like more cliches.  Please tear it apart, thank you!

Thanks
Tempting thugh it is to read the previous crits I have not succumbed. This is my take....take it or leave it

I know this,
that is,If you want to open on a cryptic note then the path is set. Trouble is, poor grammar and deliberate obfuscation are very hard to tell apart...so unless the rest of the poem goes firmly one way or the other you have shot yourself in the foot with the first line. I can see you are attempting to infer ponder and hesitancy of thought but strange and random ( perhaps the wrong descriptor...I mean "not clearly purposeful ) line breaks don't do it for me. I "think" in short but COMPLETE phrases and believe that most of us do.

you don't come around here
like you need something from me that I can't give.I am lost in the inexactitude of meaning. Is that good? You could clean this up and STILL make an impact...no, just "make an impact"
No, you don't come around at all.

For that,
I appreciate.For that I am appreciative. Is this a problem?



You're Welcome


When she was overwhelmed,Bewildered. Who she? Who he? I can just tell that you are busting to say something meaningful but you are locked in your own thinking and  have not shared enough with your reader,
You sent me away,
and gave him a sign.To be blunt. I do not get this at all...and I have tried. Lack of information is the problem

He gave me his word
that You've got her back.Why capitalise you've?
You've got her back...

I'm out in the mud,
the blood is in my arms,
but You've got her back.Wha...who...

I am dead in the water and do not care. If you "seriously" want to cameo a deep sentiment in viewable words you MUST first and foremost INCLUDE your reader. If you do not expect the words to be read...say anything. This reads like anything.
Best,
tectak