Will Shakes His Peers

[RC James]

Take my comments with a grain of salt. I like odes, and this one's on the man with quite possibly the juiciest bald pate of all time. 

What a rascal you were, to be precise, -- why are you being precise here?
a godly apparition spouting verities -- OK, seems like Shakespeare with some pithy one liners or two-page fart jokes.
heard above the din of lesser men,
shallow in their contumely for you. -- This positions the speaker as an aesthete. 

Ah, but you veiled in glissading rhyme
contempt for worrisome detractors each,
covered the field in glory manifest above, -- Manifest above seems like an inversion
with music of your fulsome brow, mannered
where necessary, but always, within reason. -- I think there are too many nonessential clauses/phrases.

We missed the first night’s fervent hush
when Juliet wakes to find Romeo’s still body, -- If your bringing in Romeo and Juliet it better be good. You know to say something new and different about it. 
and the silence, beyond applause, at the end.

We lack a visage akin to yours nowadays.
We are thirsty for wit perched upon
the brink of danger and hoary escapades. -- Hey, if we thirsted for it, we might have it. Think of all the crap we built from supply and demand.

Now, let us bend a knee and issue learned praise, -- The way it's written, I read this as learn-ed praise, which makes it sound archaic. That could be good if intentional.
this, your world, above all others, holds sway
in our minds and hearts, no other shines just so. 

First of all great job. Better than any stinking drek I've plopped from my sphincter of a mouth. 

That being said, this doesn't sound like an original voice. Normally, I hate the word "voice." I guess it means speak from the heart but still make it sound elegant or still make sound match sense or something.

To sum up, "find your voice" seems like some useless pointer you would throw out when searching for some vague tip. You may, for instance, throw that tip out with some accompanied reading out of a well known anthology. So, I guess that's what I'm giving you, a useless pointer. Good luck.