'Thanks' 'You're Welcome' edit 1 a little closer

[zorcas]

This is the intro and outro of a larger work that's supposed to follow the 5 stages of grief.  I think the 'Thanks' is fine.  'You're Welcome' was originally just called 'You've Got Her Back'  but I was thinking of the greater scheme...  which seems like more cliches.  Please tear it apart, thank you!

Thanks


I know this, These two lines not needed
that is,

You don't come around here
like you need something from me that I can't give.
No, you don't come around at all. Delete No

For that, for what?
I appreciate that.



You're Welcome


When she was overwhelmed,
you sent me away,
and gave him a sign. she  you, him confusing

He gave me his word
that you've got her back.
You've got her back... why the repeat?

I'm out in the mud,
the blood's still in my arms, what blood?
but you've got her back.

You need to develop this more because it has too many gaps and inconsistencies