The drop

[Shrewbe]

Thank you so much Kolemath and Alic Elliot for such a helpful crit. I'm so embarrassed about the sloppy punctuation and stuff I will definitely re-write this. I agree with you Kolemath I did feel as though I goofed up the time line here and there. I will prune the weak lines out.
Alic Elliot thank you so much for bringing the "him" point, I genuinely overlooked that.  I will be sitting at length sometime soon and editing this while keeping both your suggestions in mind! Thank you so much once again!