10-01-2016, 11:22 PM
(10-01-2016, 11:12 PM)Wjames Wrote: I picked up her habitsthanks for the read
like candy wrappers on the ground, interesting images, gluttony?
frowning from a sense of obligation
and disgust. obligation and disgust from what? to the habits? these words are abstract and not as strong as the candy wrapper line
I didn't throw them out
when she left. good lines/images of not letting
Now I'm rotting with the filth, filth from what? candy wrappers? are they that filthy?
and the stench is worse than a skunk
in heat. good image but without understanding what is filthy..
Thanks to this Forum

