10-01-2016, 06:10 AM
Howdy! I was wondering if you were happy with your edit here? I only ask because it's such a dramatic change from the original. Not necessarily the descriptive qualities but the layout and everything. Also, because I like both copies. I thought the original was suspenseful enough a story to drag me into the wonders of night terrors (my older brother had them growing up), maybe it was a little too spacey but I guess I was expecting something halfway instead of what seems like two extremes. The edit is very compact and suspenseful too, though. great storytelling. Hope it makes it into a larger work sometime!
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