Messenger of God

[operadiva]

I love the topic! which many people have already said. I just wanted more. i think you could describe things better. Show us exactly what is happening and why. I am not the meter/rhythm police, because I don't think it is always necessary. However, if that was your goal, it wasn't clear at all and it seemed forced. let the English flow naturally. If you was a strict rhythm you might want to double check the second half of the poem. I don't know much about the Aztec culture, which is why I wanted this poem to almost teach me more! How violent was the ritual? do people volunteer? is it an honor? Those were a few questions i had as the reader. 

Thank you so much for sharing! Keep writing and posting, I want to get a better feel for your voice.