09-24-2016, 05:16 AM
(09-24-2016, 04:23 AM)just mercedes Wrote: Shem - I really like the 'back to the ...' repeats in your poem.thanks. unfortunately, that final stanza sounds like it comes from a better poem than the first. i think i might end up taking that part and making it it's own poem and jettison the first stanza.
as for yours, very good as usual. particularly like these lines:
"darkness pushes softly against light
ready to plug any hole"
deliciously deleuzian*
*yeah, i know i bang on about that fellow all the time, but what can you do, the boy was a genius.