Meta Sylvia

[kolemath]

plath about plath?

Stroke by stroke she rows into darkness
towards an island unmarked on maps. no (wo)man is an island much? allusion to donne? i like the image

Words distract her with incense and light
or clay and blood. Space fills with language  great meta images. i like how space points back to darkness of S1
no one speaks, vacuum, furnace, not only these; i don't like semicolons used incorrectly, but who cares what i think about mechanics in poetry? the rules are yours to break
white noise like sheets over mirrors. i like the image of sheet over mirror, especially considering L1 in the following stanza; furnace is confusing though; it doesn't connect like the white which contrasts with space and darkenss

In the mirror an inverse stanza, outlined love the line, but aren't mirrors reversed in the direction perpendicular to the mirror surface instead of upside down or opposite, which inverse implies; either way, verse is the word to use, in one way or another
in obscurity; a scribble, a drizzle of soot – obscurity is abstract; good sounds for shizzle
not frozen in space but flame-nailed now furnace works better
onto the white sheet page. interesting way to say she's writing

She schemes to carry this precious chaos
to the island in a suitable chalice. Stanza good enjambment
carves the carriage, the cup, chaos, i don't like carves for some reason; well maybe i do; the agency of stanza doing the carving seems off to me somehow;
the mirror, and the island.

Big game roams here. She tracks the greatest,
captures him, writes his wrongs - steals him, good
all his desires. Exhilaration drips from her pen desire and exhilaration are abstract
like spring water. good

She’s captured him alive, tethered him
between parallel lines; now she milks him
in the desert, bleeds him carefully,
cautiously, until he’s
condensed. good revision metaphor

Then she launches her flesh canoe
towards the island
all over again. yes

the poem gains strength as it goes, which may connect to the writing process itself too. I hope the comments help. thanks for sharing