09-18-2016, 11:32 PM
The Birth of a Straight Man, v 2.1. Super close to the final edit. Basically, changed the title (it also doubles down on that Botticelli reference!), removed the numbers, tightened some structures. My biggest -- so big, I'd perhaps consider it only -- qualm right now is your perception of the last stanza, whose meaning I somewhat changed. I feel like I'm communicating my point better now ----- but then, I'm not sure if my current point is as sensitive to communicate as the earlier one.
v 2.1.1: small edits
v 2.1.1: small edits

