09-13-2016, 06:31 AM
I, just like you, have not really dug into the art of poetry but have always been enamored by it. My critiques might be of "newbie" quality so hang in there with me.
The mood you were able to create in this poem is deep. Although it is dark and melancholic, I feel a sense of hope tied into the overall piece in that you will be able to save this "You" you keep referring to from its "blackness and despair." While on the subject of this "You", who are you exactly referring to? Is it yourself? Another person? I had trouble identifying who you were talking to throughout the poem. It is an overall good piece, but I would just like some clarification on who this entity is you keep mentioning! Good work 89! Best of luck to you!
-DJ
The mood you were able to create in this poem is deep. Although it is dark and melancholic, I feel a sense of hope tied into the overall piece in that you will be able to save this "You" you keep referring to from its "blackness and despair." While on the subject of this "You", who are you exactly referring to? Is it yourself? Another person? I had trouble identifying who you were talking to throughout the poem. It is an overall good piece, but I would just like some clarification on who this entity is you keep mentioning! Good work 89! Best of luck to you!
-DJ