09-13-2016, 05:28 AM
Hi DJ,
This is a pretty poem.
I'm confused about the relevance of these lines "And dare to snare a prideful beast,
For such tendrils is no feat."
I understand it to mean that the (woman's?) beauty enraptures her admirers, but what do the tendrils refer to? Her hair? I don't know that it makes sense to me, but it might just be a lack of comprehension on my part. Also, how do the "vines" tie into the poem? Where did the vines come from?
I think the last line should be "wander..."
Very pretty, easy read, kind of reminds me of Shakespearian era poetry. The kind of poetry that speaks of unrequited love.
I would like to feel a little more inspired though. But I haven't ever studied poetry formally. I plan to do so soon. Hopefully it will add value to my critiques.
Best to you!
This is a pretty poem.
I'm confused about the relevance of these lines "And dare to snare a prideful beast,
For such tendrils is no feat."
I understand it to mean that the (woman's?) beauty enraptures her admirers, but what do the tendrils refer to? Her hair? I don't know that it makes sense to me, but it might just be a lack of comprehension on my part. Also, how do the "vines" tie into the poem? Where did the vines come from?
I think the last line should be "wander..."
Very pretty, easy read, kind of reminds me of Shakespearian era poetry. The kind of poetry that speaks of unrequited love.
I would like to feel a little more inspired though. But I haven't ever studied poetry formally. I plan to do so soon. Hopefully it will add value to my critiques.
Best to you!
"If you cannot be a poet, be the poem." - David Carradine