Truly, You Wigglethorn (an abstract poem)

[cvanshelton]

It is quite joyous -- loving  rrrrunchy skapcorch, I can hear that very clearly.

"bloopering" ruins the end for me.  It's a clumsy word and its sounds -- the oo in particular -- make it too much of a focal point against the sharp alveolar consonants (t, d) surrounding.  Although there is one other b sound in that line, abundant, it's carrying a quick syllable and doesn't detract.  Sound is vital when it's your primary driver.  Also, reign has the only long a sound aside from the beginning amorphous and it could probably be rethought.  I could pick on the overly alliterative final line but it might still work without other distractions.

Hi Leanne! Thanks so much for taking time to read and give some feedback. I struggled for awhile with "bloopering". It's a word that makes me uncomfortable for some reason. And that discomfort fascinated me a bit. I'll play with some alternatives and see how they shake out. Cheers!