09-08-2016, 06:09 AM
There are great things about this. The four different styles of writing about four different subjects connected by a title, a study in four parts.
It seems as though the study is about death. The first with the mosquito is beautiful. I thought the black and red pages was blood from having squished the mosquito but i find out way later the thing was still alive. From the sunlight to the insect, all the possibilities of God wrapped in its existence. The subject apparently found answers to questions about god, but really did not, thats why it thought briefly about closing it, and chose not to. Very open ended i dont know what answers they found
The second part with driving to amarillo. The character seems rambling along the highway its driving. Preoccupied. Then the far off headlights bring fear. The unknown possibilities, a car crash maybe, highwaymen to stop. All things in life immediately shut out by unforeseen future circumstances in the headlights.
Third part is also beautiful, and the reason i want all these studys to be split into four separate things altogether. Relating to death by focusing on the child nature, infinite possibilities in the imagination including god death and all things life brings to us with age. But i also want to see the writing itself branch like a flower petal on the page. Writing as a visual art.
Fourth part left me a little irritated because it reads more like a short story. The bird the omen, ive had that moment in life, so i liked the read.
Splitting it up like this reminded me of james joyce or thomas pynchon, both have dedicated entire chapters to changing writing styles paragraph to paragraph. Its interesting and somewhat laborious. But in your case i would rather see all these as separate studies because they can each stand alone, this could be the same study in 16 parts as long as each story was written in a different style.
It seems as though the study is about death. The first with the mosquito is beautiful. I thought the black and red pages was blood from having squished the mosquito but i find out way later the thing was still alive. From the sunlight to the insect, all the possibilities of God wrapped in its existence. The subject apparently found answers to questions about god, but really did not, thats why it thought briefly about closing it, and chose not to. Very open ended i dont know what answers they found
The second part with driving to amarillo. The character seems rambling along the highway its driving. Preoccupied. Then the far off headlights bring fear. The unknown possibilities, a car crash maybe, highwaymen to stop. All things in life immediately shut out by unforeseen future circumstances in the headlights.
Third part is also beautiful, and the reason i want all these studys to be split into four separate things altogether. Relating to death by focusing on the child nature, infinite possibilities in the imagination including god death and all things life brings to us with age. But i also want to see the writing itself branch like a flower petal on the page. Writing as a visual art.
Fourth part left me a little irritated because it reads more like a short story. The bird the omen, ive had that moment in life, so i liked the read.
Splitting it up like this reminded me of james joyce or thomas pynchon, both have dedicated entire chapters to changing writing styles paragraph to paragraph. Its interesting and somewhat laborious. But in your case i would rather see all these as separate studies because they can each stand alone, this could be the same study in 16 parts as long as each story was written in a different style.
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