09-04-2016, 11:19 AM
Wow as a gay man who remembers these awkward years of torment, this resonated with me.
I loved how you traversed the progression of years, how insults were hurtful but did not make sense.
What I got from this is that you often crashed into people, the relationships were surface level. It seems you spent a lot of time hiding your true self, being on the defense and even being angry with one self. I loved the first kiss, how it was not perfect like most of ours never were.
I could sense the struggle in this, this truly bled.
When you speak of grand things like GOD and JUSTICE, i would appreciate more direct imagery. Ways to describe those things without saying those things.
I loved how you traversed the progression of years, how insults were hurtful but did not make sense.
What I got from this is that you often crashed into people, the relationships were surface level. It seems you spent a lot of time hiding your true self, being on the defense and even being angry with one self. I loved the first kiss, how it was not perfect like most of ours never were.
I could sense the struggle in this, this truly bled.
When you speak of grand things like GOD and JUSTICE, i would appreciate more direct imagery. Ways to describe those things without saying those things.