Cricket On A Dime EDIT 2 mostly punctuation

[CRNDLSM]

I really appreciate  this feedback.  Lyrically, ill admit a lot of the wordiness was to fill space, it's very fast paced, but I can't allow myself to lose rhythm either, hence furious and curious, considerable magnificence.   

The first paragraph a lot of people stop to pick up coins, I stopped because of the cricket, and wonder about all the coins on the ground, falling out of my or anyone's pocket.
The second is about the cricket using the coin as a stage to woo a female probably, so how I could use the coin to buy you (lady friend) exotic chocolates (confidence to ask out so to speak not gold digging lol love it though)
And third paragraph is where I really wanted to rap about the sheer number of coins on the ground.  You seemed to like the third one the best which I thought was the confusing one lol. 
And to me it wouldn't be economics if it wasn't hard to read through.

I think I may drop some adjectives though, make it easier overall to sing out, doesn't need to be a tongue twister. 

Thank you again for the insight

Okay, im pretty happy with most of this, its a lyrical meditation on money, so at some parts i wanted it to read like a confusing economics book.  The last block of words is where im looking for some help maybe in the organization of ridiculousness (pronouns, prepositions, etc.) and still make sense sort of.

I saw a cricket on a dime I'm all for dropping capitalization, but shouldn't 'i' be consistent?
it was a perch of monetary significance
so i commenced to listen to its chime commenced to listen? or just listened?
and heard a chirp of considerable magnificence considerable magnificence is wordy and distracting to my eye
well a question crept up of a kind
to cause me curious cognitive dissonance i could do without curious; though cognitive dissonance works for me here
if i ever find a fortune could i redefine refined good sounds end the line
to fit my furious financial indifference without furious for me; i get the alliteration but less is more; maybe i just don't like adjectives (most of the time)
the coins are fallin out of my pocket we start with a cricket on a dime, then coins falling; i'm unsure of how the character connects them
the coins could buy me some chocolates, exotic chocolates here i like the adj.

the shiny stage had been engaged
in providing no fundamental sustenance a stage feeds?
for the creatures need were best assuaged
in captivating its targeted audience i guess you're going for confusing here; all this language is tiring though
well i wont invest or waste my hard earned wages
on risky expenses of capitalistic impudence
then again all men human know a woman who gauges
her companions by the confidence she'll influence seems cheap to throw gold diggers under the bus here; i guess it fits juxtaposed against the marketing talk though
the coins fallin out of my pocket could buy YOU some chocolates, exotic chocolates switch to 2nd person, why?
the coins could build you a rocket and launch it

a glimpse of this crickets persistence this instance cricket's
on a currency of cosmic inconsequence this line means nothing, oxymoronic, intentional?
has since then convinced me dismissal of fiscal assistance 
is complacence for economic incompetence
for if a frugal existence consists of collecting this ten cents good line
and preventing against pecuniary incontinence
you could accumulate potentially billions through the nonsensical contents
of continuous continental concrete reconnaissance
the coins fallin out of my pocket could build US a rocket and launch it
but the coins keep droppin and im not stoppin good line

i like the idea of satirizing economics with jargon, but the jargon is taking over the reading, making it a labor; satire should be more fun. cut the wordiness in half and you may have something.

thanks for sharing