09-02-2016, 09:10 AM
Thank you all for the welcome... and for the fantastic feedback! My "real life" workshop groups are afraid of critiquing form poetry, and as just mercedes pointed out, yes, it's a pantoum. It's truly refreshing to have such thorough crits!
You've addressed the spots I was unhappy with (dances, eternal moments, and fabric of horizons} and given me enough of a nudge that I think I can get out of that rut. I'll return with a rewrite shortly.
You've addressed the spots I was unhappy with (dances, eternal moments, and fabric of horizons} and given me enough of a nudge that I think I can get out of that rut. I'll return with a rewrite shortly.