09-01-2016, 09:04 AM
I rather enjoyed this poem. Maybe because it reminds me of growing up in a small country baptist church. I can remember doing most of those things and seeking the same experiences.
I loved many of the lines... "I looked for God like people look for ghost" I think you did a great job at expressing wanting to believe just like all the others and how it's often so many acting out based on what others do wanting to fit in. Things come true not because they are but because we believe they are ... Some lines aren't needed and you might could switch some sentences out....but I think a great job expressing....I enjoyed it.
I loved many of the lines... "I looked for God like people look for ghost" I think you did a great job at expressing wanting to believe just like all the others and how it's often so many acting out based on what others do wanting to fit in. Things come true not because they are but because we believe they are ... Some lines aren't needed and you might could switch some sentences out....but I think a great job expressing....I enjoyed it.