09-01-2016, 08:16 AM
with/without punctuation for doesnt make a difference. I prefer the sheath because in my mind truth cuts like a sword. Also, i think the list should be arranged so that mans complexity is last because all the falsities are delivered and interpreted by mans complexity, not the world, except that man (anything deceiving) already lies within the world (truth).
(06-09-2016, 06:41 AM)mitsuch Wrote: True
Edit 1:
We stand in this delectable land,
a casing, enveloping truth.
We live in a world sightless,
our faint ideas of the world.
A false belief is delivered,
a love that leaves us bland
An embrace, that fixates,
an untrue fleeting grace.
A cloak over sincerity,
The complex matrix of man
We lie at the mercy of ourselves,
As we lay in the world's embrace.
Original :
We stand in this delectable land
A casing, enveloping truth
We live in a world sheathed,
Our faint ideas of the world
A false belief is delivered
A love that leaves us bland
A complex matrix of man
A cloak over genuine meaning
An embrace that fixates
An untrue fleeting grace
We lay at the mercy of us
As we let ourselves into the embrace
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