08-27-2016, 05:49 PM
71degrees: thanks for clarifying that.
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Homer1950: thanks for taking the time out for my poem, I really appreciate it >< The leaning thing, I think I'll talk a bit about it here. It doesn't sound like I was successful, but I was trying to make the leaning on him (rather than into) do double duty because it's not only the physical aspect but the way that he talks for her and seems supportive and protective -- she leans on him emotionally too. And then the leaned forward later on contrasts with that. That's my thought process, but it certainly doesn't have to be that way, and I'll take your opinions into account in the revision. Thank you again.
lizziep
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Homer1950: thanks for taking the time out for my poem, I really appreciate it >
< The leaning thing, I think I'll talk a bit about it here. It doesn't sound like I was successful, but I was trying to make the leaning on him (rather than into) do double duty because it's not only the physical aspect but the way that he talks for her and seems supportive and protective -- she leans on him emotionally too. And then the leaned forward later on contrasts with that. That's my thought process, but it certainly doesn't have to be that way, and I'll take your opinions into account in the revision. Thank you again. lizziep