Red Patent Shoes -- revision

[makeshift]

A man and woman sat across
from me. She reclined into him  The surprising line break here might be too much? I dig the effect but feel like it should be more subtle, in accordance with the softness of the following images
like he was a plush couch,
warming herself in his cashmere arms, I can feel this nice, and already empathize with a jealousy I project on the narrator
a familiar blanket. The way she leaned on him,
he seemed to be the only solid part of her.  This is my favorite line of the poem, makes me think of a Mattise figure or something, beautiful image, with a nice metaphor 2 boot
She rarely spoke; he talked almost continuously.
When he spoke to me he said, "I noticed your shoes,"  These last two lines seem clunkier then the rest of the poem, maybe: She rarely spoke; he said to me "I noticed your shoes"

and she pulled away  Could probably omit and
from him, rigid,
as if to acquire
a wider image
of a foreign object. I like these three lines. First couple times I read this I imagined the narrator as a boy, when I read them as a girl, which makes a lot more sense for red shoes I think, this whole stanza got a good deal clearer. Anyway, this is a surprising moment, and for me the most interesting part of the poem.
Then she leaned
toward me,
and remained that way,
like a meerkat Theres some humor to this image!
on guard.

With the first stanza I assumed this poem was about the narrators jealousy, then I understood the second stanza as a shift, where its more about some ones proctectiveness or insecurity. I like the meerkat similie, makes me think about how instinctive are interactions can be. Its a nice vignette. Thnx for sharing