Messenger of God

[Lizzie]

As noted by others, I think that this is a wonderful topic, rich with potential. I do think that one thing you have working against you is that your reader may not have the same knowledge base about Aztec ritual as you. I would only have understood the significance of the 'swallowing the stars and night sky' because I looked at the Wiki article you posted after the fact. When I first read the poem, I thought that line read very awkwardly and made little sense. So, yeah. Great potential here, just be careful to take your readers along with you and don't assume that they understand what you do.

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lizziep