Routines: Poem 1

[zorcas]

The previous comments lead to this conclusion: you've written a poem  with no apparent point so we get mostly a listing of routines none of which are remarkable. Imagine if the next day someone asked how yesterday had gone and you told them  what you put into the poem: they'd die of boredom. If you reread the poem carefully you might see that the only original description of anything is in the last stanza and discover that none of what precedes it has any bearing. Indeed, you sent this in long before it was ready. Ask yourself, "'What do I want to say?" Then say it in as few words as possible. Once the path is clear, embellish, decorate and explain, never getting off the path you chose.