Skeleton On The Sea Floor -- revision
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I like the briefness of the poem but it could have used more detail. The metaphor of the skeleton is good but if it didn't have a title the reader might not get the metaphor. I really like the continuation of "It just appeared there one day," it makes the poem flow much better than if it was worded differently.
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Skeleton On The Sea Floor -- revision - by Lizzie - 08-11-2016, 12:26 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by kolemath - 08-11-2016, 12:49 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Achebe - 08-11-2016, 09:13 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Shay - 08-12-2016, 04:41 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by just mercedes - 08-12-2016, 05:21 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by monablackbird - 08-12-2016, 11:29 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by comandoartjunky - 08-13-2016, 01:27 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by BW BRINE - 08-13-2016, 05:00 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 08-13-2016, 10:52 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by cvanshelton - 08-17-2016, 02:34 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 08-18-2016, 07:22 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by stampede331 - 08-26-2016, 03:42 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 08-27-2016, 05:57 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by maximuswolf - 09-01-2016, 09:33 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 09-01-2016, 12:36 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by loboflo - 09-17-2016, 06:29 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 09-17-2016, 02:25 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by heslopian - 09-20-2016, 10:13 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 09-21-2016, 04:05 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by QDeathstar - 09-21-2016, 11:44 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 09-22-2016, 03:41 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by QDeathstar - 09-22-2016, 10:49 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by EarthwareVessel - 09-25-2016, 10:51 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 09-26-2016, 11:27 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by nikkisto - 09-25-2016, 10:13 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Donald Q. - 09-28-2016, 06:08 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 09-28-2016, 11:53 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Donald Q. - 09-28-2016, 05:15 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 09-28-2016, 11:16 PM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Lizzie - 10-15-2016, 07:02 AM
RE: Skeleton On The Sea Floor - by Achebe - 10-15-2016, 07:18 AM



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