Skeleton On The Sea Floor -- revision

[just mercedes]

Hi Lizzie - For me the repeated line works well, and the images make me think of a person who's lost track of their 'flesh' or identity . The only hiccups for me were the change from 'it' to 'they' and the change in tenses between 2nd and 3rd line. Minor. I like the use of the 'ee' sound rhymes in the last 4 lines, because your mouth is in a smile shape when you say 'ee' so for me this added a layer of narrator saying 'this isn't all that serious'. Great concluding image.