Skeleton On The Sea Floor -- revision

[kolemath]

It just appeared there one day, fused to the seabed
as one clinically depressed merges with their mattress
or decomposes into couch cushions. Weight fell
like a thick blanket over their face as they slept,
convincing the mind to keep dreaming and the lungs to surrender.
It just appeared there one day, like a woman
of thirty-five suddenly seeing her feet wearing sensible heels,
sitting behind a desk with a picture of a husband and two kids,
unable to breathe.

I like the poem especially the repetition of logic through different images. it reads like a spiral which captures the mind of the speaker. might I suggest the blanket Suffocation come later? it would fit a more  sequential narrative structure to my reading if so