my own mind

[Lizzie]

Hi wipmp! I really like this, mostly because I also have spent a lot of time in my own mind. I think that we have that complexity in common. So, on to the poem.

I have spent so much time there.
I know its pathways. -- sorry this font is so wonky. I don't know how to change it. Anyway, I like how pathways moves into the arching terraces, the wandering, the meadow. It works well to convey a 'landscape' that is well known.
 
Pronounced and strong
arching terraces of beautiful memories.
Low hanging fruit
rendered from reality. -- I would rework these so that they are not sentence fragments. Also, periods provide unnecessarily abrupt end stops that work against the feeling of meandering around in the brain that you're trying to cultivate. I would lengthen your lines, utilize other forms of punctuation like em dashes, commas, semi colons to give more of a fluidity to the writing. Longer lines give more of a relaxed, rambling sense, and short lines are more tense and keep the reader moving quickly through the poem, almost hurried.
 
Generous abundant confidence
mostly secured somehow. -- need some imagery here to bring this to life. I think that this is one of your ideas for the poem, now you need to bring that idea to life with metaphor, images, etc. And I'm not a fan of using deliberately vague words like "somehow" "sometimes" "somewhere" "something" Every once in a while it works, but it mostly seems like the author gave up on finding better words.
Saved for times of need. -- fragment
 
Individual interpretation
of events. -- fragment
Sometimes I can trust it. This line is complete, but it's an unsatisfying ending. "It" feels weak, both because it isn't descriptive, and because it's generally an uninteresting word to break on a line on. Just as on is an uninteresting word to break a line on. So, maybe I'm not the best model here!
 
Perplexing perpetuation
of habits unintended. -- I have no idea what this means.
Wayward wandering. -- fragment. And now the font goes back to normal. Sorry bout that.
 
Lost in an meadow
twittering with birds,
lined with a creek swimming
with fishes. -- I would tie these elements to specific aspects of your mental structure -- these could be a great base for a metaphor.
 
When I intended to be
occupied attentively
in a meeting I know is
important. -- Humorous. It might not be intended as humorous, but I found it such. I like.
 
Oh how I long to release it. -- need a stronger ending, again. The last word of the line is really important, as it stands out more than the rest of the sentence. Line breaks are your opportunity to highlight important words that you want to really stand out.
Oh how I worry where it would take me.

Thanks for sharing! I look forward to reading more from you ><