08-11-2016, 02:39 AM
First sentence: A run on sentence full of dependent clauses. By its nature inherently nonsensical.
The dual spark a swift lark promises the bridge to itch the itch feeling to affirm not soft but firm crash through the wall budge unbudgeable ball light so bright in eye's middle night breathes warmth as home's hot hearth uncountable lanterns
speak loss and returns scream envy and yearn wink long and take turns glare into the stare or stare into it.
Second sentence:
"Glare into the stare or stare into it."
As glare and stare are similar words, it makes as much sense to say:
Stare into the stare or stare into it.
Third sentence: reversed syntax
You'll all be laid bare, split-second intimate invisible discourse does promise a source.
Fourth sentence: "eyes" cannot swear, unless this is Popeye speaking and "B" does not follow "A", i.e., " of course there's a source!" does not follow from "Yes, eyes swear until hoarse". Nor does "A" lead to, or create "B".
Yes, eyes swear until hoarse: of course there's a source!
Overall, this poem seems more about making rhymes and possibly word play, than having any inherent meaning. This is certainly something I find fun to do, although I don't think it provides much for the reader.
Best,
dale
The dual spark a swift lark promises the bridge to itch the itch feeling to affirm not soft but firm crash through the wall budge unbudgeable ball light so bright in eye's middle night breathes warmth as home's hot hearth uncountable lanterns
speak loss and returns scream envy and yearn wink long and take turns glare into the stare or stare into it.
Second sentence:
"Glare into the stare or stare into it."
As glare and stare are similar words, it makes as much sense to say:
Stare into the stare or stare into it.
Third sentence: reversed syntax
You'll all be laid bare, split-second intimate invisible discourse does promise a source.
Fourth sentence: "eyes" cannot swear, unless this is Popeye speaking and "B" does not follow "A", i.e., " of course there's a source!" does not follow from "Yes, eyes swear until hoarse". Nor does "A" lead to, or create "B".
Yes, eyes swear until hoarse: of course there's a source!
Overall, this poem seems more about making rhymes and possibly word play, than having any inherent meaning. This is certainly something I find fun to do, although I don't think it provides much for the reader.
Best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.