Our Daughters in the Backyard Swing

[sapril]

this is such a blending of worlds. It's really beautiful and you've mastered the elusive gift of storytelling inside a nice compacted poem. I've read the re-writes and i find you've adjusted brilliantly. In my opinion I adore, "laughing chin" because it really feels like you can't read that without thinking of a small face all crinkled and folded with giggles etching into them. well done, i love it.