EDIT Cleaning

[Keith]

 
Spring Cleaning
 
Springing into action
with the warming ground, This is a weak opening and not needed given the title.
 
birds scouring the lawn for twigs, same here, I do understand you are trying draw in nature but these two lines are bland.
bears at berry bushes, nice alteration but not sure where its going.
 
I am in the closets and attic For me the poem stats here, pick one...closets or attic and show it to the reader
throwing things out
the windows and doors. again, I want to see more feed my imagination.
 
Holy sweatshirts.  Mangled papers.  Neglected toys.
A cloud of dust and sneezing. I like this I'm getting into the poem and its setting now
 
At the bottom of the piles,
a faded flannel shirt
my wife wore
pregnant as the moon lovely, really got me involved at this point and delightful image.
and breast feeding. not needed given the next line which really hits the senses in a nice sickly sweet way
 
The smell of sour milk in the fabric.yes this one
 
I fold the shirt neatly into her drawer.
 
When I’m nothing more
than the dust you sneeze out nice loop back to the room and the significance of the insignificant.
and you find this precious flannel fabric
moth eaten and rotten good images
 
you’ll throw it out, disgusted
someone could keep that? I can see this happening again works well for me
 
But I’ll be there to remind you why,
whoever’s there to bless you. The end pair needs sorting out, it doesn't really make sense to me and to be honest I wanted something more of a declaration or better still a hint at some insight.

Hi Kolemath
I like the idea behind this and the sentiment for me as a reader is very strong, child and mother memories that are given an opportunity to exist beyond those who remember whats behind them, very nice. I think you need to pair the whole piece back, really set the scene and make the idea stand out. I have some comment above and it may seem harsh but I do hope it helps. Thanks for posting. Best Keith