08-01-2016, 06:09 AM
It's so cool that you still have your early writing. I moved so many times I lost track of them all, except one in the school magazine when I was 15. I didn't write poetry again for 40+ years.
What I like about your poem is its adult awareness of loss, and fleeting things - it almost reaches through time, for me.
How long since you wrote it, I wonder. 20 years?
We need an emoji for 'awestruck' for the way you picked it up and ran with it. And knit together with such slant rhyme and enjambment.
What I like about your poem is its adult awareness of loss, and fleeting things - it almost reaches through time, for me.
How long since you wrote it, I wonder. 20 years?
(07-31-2016, 12:44 PM)Leanne Wrote: I love the girl you love, or loved
when rain washed her colours across years
and danced her here. In my mind, she
and you are 14, true, and free to become
poetry, or tragedy, or the tears that pool
in the breath of tomorrow.
We need an emoji for 'awestruck' for the way you picked it up and ran with it. And knit together with such slant rhyme and enjambment.