Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight

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Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight

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07-31-2016, 10:33 PM

In the original poem, Line 2 is a strong observation and I love how you ended this. Much better than anything I wrote at 15.

The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson

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Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by shemthepenman - 07-31-2016, 09:12 AM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by Lizzie - 07-31-2016, 11:13 AM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by shemthepenman - 07-31-2016, 12:00 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by Lizzie - 07-31-2016, 12:15 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by shemthepenman - 07-31-2016, 12:26 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by Lizzie - 07-31-2016, 12:40 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by shemthepenman - 07-31-2016, 01:07 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by RiverNotch - 07-31-2016, 02:14 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by UselessBlueprint - 07-31-2016, 12:30 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by RiverNotch - 07-31-2016, 12:18 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by shemthepenman - 07-31-2016, 12:37 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by Leanne - 07-31-2016, 12:44 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by Todd - 07-31-2016, 10:30 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by Lizzie - 08-01-2016, 04:56 AM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by Achebe - 07-31-2016, 05:47 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by Lizzie - 07-31-2016, 06:06 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by Todd - 07-31-2016, 10:33 PM

RE: Each Unchanged Recorder Loses Underneath The Malicious Daylight - by just mercedes - 08-01-2016, 06:09 AM

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