Happiness won't take turns -- edit 1

[RiverNotch]

I always find four lines to be more complete (like perhaps that whole forty days symbolism in the bible) but everything seems alright. The rhythm kinda reminds me of one of those longish prosish poems like Whitman or Ginsberg. And yeah, the possessives ain't no issue anymore. A little bugged, too, by the semicolon, but as far as I know, the usage ain't offensive, so nevermind.

Still good stuff. I like how this ties with the next short poem you posted.