The Original Narcissist

[Lizzie]

Hi Lizzie,

I like the poem but not too keen on the title, it feels like it's a cliche or a cliche by proxy (sort of). The poem says what the title says anyway so it could also be said that it's redundant. Another possible issue with 'golden girl', if there was another way of saying this it would be good.

I like a poem that makes me think and this one has done that. 

slight digression—Your poem actually made me think of Great White Sharks. I used to be fascinated by them and once read that even though 3 or 4 sharks may be conceived only one is born. The strongest one kills the other sharks in the womb. "Life values nothing but its own continuation"—digression over

Thanks for the read,

Mark

Yeah, that's such a perfect example with the sharks. I didn't know that about them, but many species have a kind of system where they kill off the weakest of the young so that the stronger ones can survive. Despite the seeming callousness and arrogance of the poem, these kinds of things make me inconsolably sad.

Ok, not married at all to the title, just trying to throw in the continuation theme. I was hoping to subvert the cliche, not to have it infect everything around it

Thanks for the read and the helpful feedback, Mark. ><